LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 (edited) Her life might aswell be over. She's found him, but he loves her. What's left for her now? Misery. Pain. Heartache. The thought of him made her tingle inside. She knew he was the one. Or rather he had been. A tear slid down her cheek as she tried to think of her purpose in life, she had none. She was worthless. Had her hints to reveal her love to him not been enough? Anyway, it didn't matter anymore. Not now that he had her. She had the sudden urge to run; she wanted to get away from all of this. She changed out of her clothes and phased quickly, feeling a burning sensation prickle her skin and a sudden adrenaline rush wash through her. But he was waiting for her, waiting for her to phase, waiting to hear her every thought. Leah. Leave me alone. Please. Tell me what's wrong! Maybe I can help. *silence* She had phased back, not before he had seen where she was though. He also changed back to his human form and raced to talk to her. She carefully wrote out a note. Her hands shaking the whole time. She knew he would find it. She would have to be quick or he would try to talk her out of it. She held a handful of pills in one hand and a bottle of alcohol in the other, swallowing them down without hesitation. He was the last thing she thought of. His perfect face appeared in her mind as she drifted in and out of consciousness before settling down into a deep and peaceful sleep in which she would never be woken from. His breath caught in his throat as he hesitantly made his way over to the still girl lying in the sand. "Leah!" He called out. Nothing. He was too late. When he finally got to her he looked down at her perfect face, pushed a strand of hair from her eyes and wiped away the single teardrop that lay on her cheek. That was when he broke down. She looked so peaceful, so beautiful. He pushed his lips firmly against hers. He realised he had been in love with her. All this time and he never knew. Only now....now that it was too late. He picked up the lifeless girl and held her in his strong arms, pressing her to his bare chest. Then, he spotted a crumpled piece of paper; it had her delicate handwriting on it. He picked it up and read the eight words that would stay with him for the rest of his life. I loved you Jacob Black. But love hurts. Name: Leah Tait Age: 16 Edited January 31, 2009 by LeahBlack. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Oh...My...God *sobs silently* how, oh... i can't even find words... umm... that's soo good. i almost want to cry... although, if you'd gone on any more, i probably would do. great work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tomcasstillie Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 woah that's fantastic :') Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jess8619 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 AH! I love this! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jjthedq Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 At first I thought it was New Moon, but it's Breaking Dawn! Like you (I think), I suspect Leah liked Jacob just a bit more than she let on. I'm majorly against Jacob/Renestard because it just...gah, I won't go into the rant. Anyway, loved this because to me, it's partly how it should have turned out. A mix of truth (he loved her, she loved him) with the consequences of reality (she was alone, and she finally gave up trying to be ok with it). Really beautiful writing, and I liked how you laid it out. Leah seemed a bit more romantic than I've always thought of her, but I'm a hopeless romantic, so that suited me just fine as a reader! Great job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miss Ragamuffin Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 aww thats so lovely and so sad too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evie_Nitram Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Ohhh I have tingles. That was very moving in a haunting sort of way. Poor Leah - she just doesn't seem to have any luck when it comes to boys, does she? In breaking dawn I kinda thought Stephenie Meyer was building up to a Leah/Jacob match, but that just made the Renesmee thing even more surprising... (Okay, it wasn't that much of a surprise. I could see the imprintation happening as soon as Bella 'died' in Breaking Dawn!) Great story. well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Thanks for your positive comments :) I live for lovely feedback Thankyouu, all of you xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Thanks for your positive comments :) I live for lovely feedback Thankyouu, all of you xxx haha i love good feedback too.... your piece was really good. romantic but sad at the same time. a little like romeo and juliet... except they dont get to express their feelings. okay maybe thats just my view haha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Thanks for your positive comments :) I live for lovely feedback Thankyouu, all of you xxx haha i love good feedback too.... your piece was really good. romantic but sad at the same time. a little like romeo and juliet... except they dont get to express their feelings. okay maybe thats just my view haha Awhhhhh, thankyouu sooo much :) Yours is amazing too! I loved it! Made me giggle xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 that's so cool you always kinda get the impression leah crushes on jake in breaking dawn too and she's always so down so it works really well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theblackrose Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Excellent writing, had to brush away a tear. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
louisesuperstar Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Oh dark love! One of my favs. Lots of good fanfictions going on here, I do not envy the judges. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Thanks guys :) Your comments make me feel happy xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beckycullen113 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 This is amaising, seriously, I mean alot of people had said that leah was in love with jacob but this is taking it to anouther level, stunning! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beckycullen113 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Listen to Misery Buisness by paramore when reading this, imagine Renesme singing it, Leah should have Jacob, Renesme, if leah does love jacob, she stole him from her! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Ahaa, thankyouu lotss for your comments Becky :) Keep em coming everyone. Makes me smile like this lol. xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xrachel_owenx Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 this is so sad!!! and amazing!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms_Dazzled Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 This is so good.. I actually did think at one point Leah and Jacob would end up together... xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carlistara Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Fantastic! Really, fantastic! There go my chances... I wish you the best of luck! You´re such a talented lass! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 Thankyouu :) I wish all of you who have entered/are entering the best of luck :) All the stories are amazing so far! xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators krisieeh Posted February 1, 2009 Moderators Share Posted February 1, 2009 Wow. One word.. Amazinggg. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted February 1, 2009 Author Share Posted February 1, 2009 Wow. One word.. Amazinggg. Awhhh, thanks lotsss. :) xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chimmykins Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Oh my god! Poor Leah. I loved reading that, gave me chills. So sad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted February 1, 2009 Author Share Posted February 1, 2009 Oh my god! Poor Leah. I loved reading that, gave me chills. So sad. Awhh, thanks :) I really appreciate you commenting :) xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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