nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 (edited) Was it my determination as a doctor to give her another chance at some kind of life or my selfish desire to keep her all for myself? I had come to see her as a corpse rather than a woman so was surprised when a short breath escaped her grey but still beautiful lips. They told me that she'd jumped from the cliff but nobody seemed to know why. This fragile creature surely wasn't alone in this world? Was there a husband waiting in the reception of the hospital to hear the news that his beloved had taken her own life? No one had yet come to claim her. Still, she had only lain upon this cold slab for a matter of minutes. Was it only minutes? It felt like I had lost days staring into her peaceful face, she seemed so easy as she drew in shuddering breaths that kept her body filled with feeble life. It could be snuffed out at any moment, I wondered if I had the right to do that for her or if I should let nature run its course. It wasn't her time, she'd thrown herself down into those rocks rather than waiting for her life to run into death naturally. I could give her so much more. She would be radiant, a true angel but with a cost. I believed though that so perfect a woman could not be denied into heaven no matter what she became, I was sure that she would bring honour and warmth to our cold kind. My hand shook, I lifted it only to brush a strand of her auburn hair from her face, I was so scared of breaking her that such a light movement filled me with dread. I wished that I could hear her voice before I did it. If only we had met under different circumstances and then I could have introduced myself properly, had the time to really get to know her. Then would I have had the heart to change her and rip her out of her comfortable human world? I couldn't bear to see her in such agony any longer. I placed my pale slender fingers against her cheek, warmer than my own skin but so cold for a human. She didn't react at all as I sank my teeth against her jugular and pierced the skin. The venom flowed from my mouth into the wound and her sweet warm blood gushed over my tongue and down my throat. I pulled away. It was so hard but my longing to be with her overpowered the monster that had risen in my chest. It was the end of my shift when I stole her away back to the home I shared with Edward. "What's your name?" the question came on the third day when her eyes finally opened. "Esme." Her voice was like a song to me, "I'm Carlisle, there's a lot I need to tell you." A whole new life. ____________ By: Natalie Penna, Brighton, England - Ticket Number G75 Edited January 31, 2009 by nightshadewolf Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jess8619 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Whoa, Screw any chances I had of winning. That was Awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jazz5490 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 amazing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Gahhh! Amazingg! I love how everyone is doing their stories in different POV's :) This is really sweet :) xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jess8619 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 I like how we both (My fanfic is about Jasper) used the term "Monster" to describe their feelings of themselves. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 *blushes and hides* thanks guys, I don't usually do fanfics cus it gets me out of the habit of my own writing but I felt like this relationship isn't explored enough in the book, just like all the other 'secondary' characters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theblackrose Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Wow, fantastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TSheep15 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 I love you Natalie, you are an awesome writer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 thanks guys *tackles emma* i love you too! <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 thats really good. great description Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 thats really good. great description Thankies Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
louisesuperstar Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Woo love it! Actually great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Woo love it! Actually great. *blush* thankies Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carlistara Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 *blushes and hides* thanks guys, I don't usually do fanfics cus it gets me out of the habit of my own writing but I felt like this relationship isn't explored enough in the book, just like all the other 'secondary' characters. I absolutely agree! And do love your story! Good luck, hun! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chimmykins Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Esme and Carlisle. <3 I loved reading this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 Thanks guys *blush* I hope Peter reads it, I don't mind if I win or not, it's just nice getting people to read my stuff i'd like to win tho, lol, i doubt i will, the other stories on here are amazing... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evie_Nitram Posted February 2, 2009 Share Posted February 2, 2009 I really enjoyed that. How sweet the bitter turmoil that Carlisle feels about changing her. Well done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted February 3, 2009 Author Share Posted February 3, 2009 I really enjoyed that. How sweet the bitter turmoil that Carlisle feels about changing her. Well done! Thankie I spose its the way Edward must have felt when Bella was turned, probs the same with all of them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted February 19, 2009 Author Share Posted February 19, 2009 squee! one week away, I can't believe it and the comp is closed. Wow, so many of these fan fics are totally amazing. I don't envy the judges. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xbellarose Posted February 19, 2009 Share Posted February 19, 2009 Yay for carlisle I love this story I think its amazing good luck! xoxo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted February 21, 2009 Author Share Posted February 21, 2009 Yay for carlisle I love this story I think its amazing good luck! xoxo Thanks so much I'm nervous now, I'd like to be one of the finalists but all of the stories are so amazing I don't think I have much of a chance! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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