Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 (edited) I woke up from a hard night sleep, from staying up with Edward til 5 in the morning. I thought we had school, but... "Morning!" Edward kissed me on the forehead and I turned my face to look into his amazing eyes. He was smirking, like he'd won a prize. "All ready for school?" I said, smiling. "Umm I hate to break it to you but..." He pointed to the window. The curtains had been opened at some point. "SNOW!" I groaned. The worst possible weather, ever. "So what have you got planned for today? Since we don't have school." I asked, realising what snow would mean. My bedside clock told me it was 8am. He considered that question for a moment. "I was thinking, we could go to my place, and help Alice with some decorations she's putting up for," he played a fake cough and mumbled "thanksgiving." Edward shifted position slightly, although this didn't seem to bother me. Something that did bother me however, was something he just mentioned. Something about thanksgiving. I blinked. "You... celebrate... thanksgiving?" I spluttered. Edward didn't seem to find this funny. He put on a serious face, but hiding a smirk, I could tell. "Well of course we do, why shouldn't we? Don't you celebrate thanksgiving?" He sounded so serious, I think he really meant it. "Well, yes, I do. But... I just didn't expect your family to do the same thing, that's all. You caught me off guard." I said. I looked at the floor. Edward was silent. "I'm sorry" I moved in close to him and he wrapped his arms around me. I felt the cold suddenly hit my nervous system, I tried to hide it. "I mean, it's great you all celebrate. I'm sure Alice has a whale of a time, with the decorations." I sat up and looked into his eyes curiously. "Hang on!" I pondered. "Most families have a meal together too as part of the day. What do you do? I mean, surely you don't cook?" I raised my eyebrows and watched his expression change from serious to his crooked smile. It clicked. "Ooh I see." I rolled my eyes. "Yes, that's definitely more fun. Why wait for a butcher to kill an animal, when you can just go out and get it yourself" I said sarcastically. When we got to his place, Alice was putting up decorations by the door. She smiled as I walked in the house. "Hey Bella! You've come to join us for dinner then I suppose?" Alice grinned while Edward glared at her. Obviously not wanting me to feel uncomfortable. "Err yeah, I guess I have." Emmett peered out from the kitchen, "Hey Bella" I then saw him heaving a huge piece of meat onto the kitchen table. "Dinner's ready!" shouted Esme from the table. And I along with Edward and Alice, went to sit. With six interested eyes looking at me, I began to eat. name: Katheryn Rodzianko Edited February 6, 2009 by Edwardsbackupgirl Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evie_Nitram Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Ohhh great entry!! I like your style of writing - I really could imagine Edward and Bella acting like that! Kinda funny imagery going on at the end as well, with Bella getting to eat all the food by herself. Talk about awkward moment for her! hehehe Well done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Ohhh great entry!! I like your style of writing - I really could imagine Edward and Bella acting like that! Kinda funny imagery going on at the end as well, with Bella getting to eat all the food by herself. Talk about awkward moment for her! hehehe Well done! OMG thankyou! hehe i feel so proud of myself when i get positive feedback. hehehe i also get giddy! haa Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miss Ragamuffin Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 yeah its a great read I enjoyed you definitly got Edward and Bella down perfectly I too can really see them in this stituation! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jjthedq Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 I love the idea of this story! It's heartwarming. I mean, after so many years, the Cullens get to have Thanksgiving with a human, eating all the turkey and things...I can imagine they went WAY overboard with the amount of food they made too, just as it should be, haha! I wonder what decorations Alice was putting up? My Mum always just put fall decor up, except when my little sister and I were in elementary school and brought back silly "art" projects like turkeys made out of handprints or pilgrim hats. Aww, now I kind of miss Thanksgiving! You made me nostalgic, Edwardsbackupgirl! :) Great job! It didn't feel like a short story. It had just the right pace to make things run smoothly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 I love the idea of this story! It's heartwarming. I mean, after so many years, the Cullens get to have Thanksgiving with a human, eating all the turkey and things...I can imagine they went WAY overboard with the amount of food they made too, just as it should be, haha! I wonder what decorations Alice was putting up? My Mum always just put fall decor up, except when my little sister and I were in elementary school and brought back silly "art" projects like turkeys made out of handprints or pilgrim hats. Aww, now I kind of miss Thanksgiving! You made me nostalgic, Edwardsbackupgirl! :) Great job! It didn't feel like a short story. It had just the right pace to make things run smoothly. hahah thanks. umm well the big story where this "short story" came from is about 12pages long... so in effect, its not really a short story as such. i just condensed it to have a so-so decent ending. i know its a cliff hanger. altho, i hadnt even got to the ending of my big fanfic... at least now i have a heading for an ending hahahhaa Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jjthedq Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 I love the idea of this story! It's heartwarming. I mean, after so many years, the Cullens get to have Thanksgiving with a human, eating all the turkey and things...I can imagine they went WAY overboard with the amount of food they made too, just as it should be, haha! I wonder what decorations Alice was putting up? My Mum always just put fall decor up, except when my little sister and I were in elementary school and brought back silly "art" projects like turkeys made out of handprints or pilgrim hats. Aww, now I kind of miss Thanksgiving! You made me nostalgic, Edwardsbackupgirl! :) Great job! It didn't feel like a short story. It had just the right pace to make things run smoothly. hahah thanks. umm well the big story where this "short story" came from is about 12pages long... so in effect, its not really a short story as such. i just condensed it to have a so-so decent ending. i know its a cliff hanger. altho, i hadnt even got to the ending of my big fanfic... at least now i have a heading for an ending hahahhaa I don't know if this is good or bad, but it didn't feel like a cliff hanger to me. That's part of why I liked it. I was content that the piece could end and I wouldn't stay up all night wondering what happened next. It was like peaking into a day in the life of E&B. Those, to me, are the best kind of stories. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Ahhh, this was amazing! I loved it xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
canaliens Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 that was REALLY good! Perfect ending, very in-keeping with how the Cullens seemed to be adapting to having a human in their midst. Very sweet too, this is going to be a tough competition haha! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 I love the idea of this story! It's heartwarming. I mean, after so many years, the Cullens get to have Thanksgiving with a human, eating all the turkey and things...I can imagine they went WAY overboard with the amount of food they made too, just as it should be, haha! I wonder what decorations Alice was putting up? My Mum always just put fall decor up, except when my little sister and I were in elementary school and brought back silly "art" projects like turkeys made out of handprints or pilgrim hats. Aww, now I kind of miss Thanksgiving! You made me nostalgic, Edwardsbackupgirl! :) Great job! It didn't feel like a short story. It had just the right pace to make things run smoothly. hahah thanks. umm well the big story where this "short story" came from is about 12pages long... so in effect, its not really a short story as such. i just condensed it to have a so-so decent ending. i know its a cliff hanger. altho, i hadnt even got to the ending of my big fanfic... at least now i have a heading for an ending hahahhaa I don't know if this is good or bad, but it didn't feel like a cliff hanger to me. That's part of why I liked it. I was content that the piece could end and I wouldn't stay up all night wondering what happened next. It was like peaking into a day in the life of E&B. Those, to me, are the best kind of stories. :) i know to some it might not seem like a huge cliff hanger... i think because i know that its not finished... so to me it was one. but to others maybe not . not everyone is gonna like it... i'm just very pleased that so far people do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theblackrose Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 [hahah thanks. umm well the big story where this "short story" came from is about 12pages long... so in effect, its not really a short story as such. i just condensed it to have a so-so decent ending. i know its a cliff hanger. altho, i hadnt even got to the ending of my big fanfic... at least now i have a heading for an ending hahahhaa This was so fantastic. I would love to read 'the big story'. You have a real feel for the things they would say and how they would act. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
louisesuperstar Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 *has a really comical view of them around the table with a huge spread with only Bella eating* Its good, really nice flow and style and follows Bellas thoughts well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carlistara Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Wow, another great one! This is gonna be a tough contest! I love your style and how the story developes! Good job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 hey, thanks everyone for the great comments. makes me feel all giddy inside Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Edwardsbackupgirl Posted February 15, 2009 Author Share Posted February 15, 2009 hey how come my fanfic is at the bottom.... i'm gonna get it to the top yaya ahaha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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