freakie_frenchi Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 (edited) As Bella screamed her last sentence at me it hit me like a bolt of lightning. Bella opened the door hurriedly and slammed it behind her. I looked up and stared at the door longing for my daughter to walk back in and apologize. Those words so powerful, so familiar. It pierced my heart like a thousand knives. Renee had used the same words when she had walked out on me all those years ago. I crumbled to the floor sobbing into my hands. Memories came flooding back to me opening up time healed wounds. The scars had never faded. The hope that my sweet Renee would come back to Forks one day, just filled my heart with joy. I heard Bella's truck start up and almost 'speed' away. Every thing happened so fast. What had that boy done? Why didn't she use her pepper spray? I gave it to her for that reason. Time felt like it had suddenly slowed down. As I got up from my crouching position I almost toppled over with grief. I steadied my self using the kitchen table. I gripped to the table so hard as if I was gripping onto life. I inhaled a quick breath making it sharp and jagged. I wiped my eyes with the back of my free hand. The tears did not stop coming as I thought more and more of how my only daughter hated me so much she would just leave me. The pain racked my body as I shook trying to steady myself without the help of the kitchen table. I had failed miserably to steady myself...I had failed at being a good father. My mind raced. What did I do now? Did I go after her, try to bring her home? Did I call Renee and let her deal with it all? After all Bella dosent want to see me again does she? It had felt like hours had passed but in reality it had only been a few minutes. The heavy flow of tears had been reduced to loud sniffs as my nose ran wildly. I felt my wet cheek with my hand and looked at the salty water now covering my hand. I walked to the door my only daughter walked out of for the last time. I placed my dry hand onto the door handle and shuddered as the handle came into contact with me. I felt a man sized tear fall down my already tear stained cheek. One hand still clutching the door handle and the other hand placed upon the door steadying me. I placed my head gently against the door and rested it there hoping to grab some connection to the outside world. I turned around so quickly it was like the door had burnt me. My eyes deceived me as they began to pour more tears. I sat down on one of the mismatched chairs and put my head into my hands sobbing. Frenchi Burchill Edited February 5, 2009 by freakie_frenchi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tomcasstillie Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 This is amazing it's an great pov too a powerful moment for charlie also I loved the mention of the pepperspray :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xVickyCullenx Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Aww, poor Charlie! This was great- I'd never really thought about how Charlie reacted to that in the book Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chimmykins Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Aww Charlie. Good read, I'd always thought about how Charlie reacted when Bella left him. Great POV. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakie_frenchi Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 thank you for your comments!! i have always wondered what happened with charlie when bella left! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
timpe Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Loved it. Nice to read something from a different character's POV. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Awhhh This is soo sad! Poor Charlie Amazing writing though :) xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakie_frenchi Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 thank you... i wrote this while i have writers block... so its not my best work! lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carlistara Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 thank you for your comments!! i have always wondered what happened with charlie when bella left! So have I! Thanks for filling that blank spot for me good job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakie_frenchi Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 ^^^ thank you! i cant believe the amount of good comments im getting!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms_Dazzled Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 aww poor Charlie... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakie_frenchi Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 charlie never show emotions i felt now was the time! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EdwardsLamb Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Aww.. I never thought Charlie would cry but you convinced me that its possible Really original idea writing from Charlies POV Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shando Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Aah, poor Charlie. That was so sad but brilliant writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakie_frenchi Posted February 1, 2009 Author Share Posted February 1, 2009 Aah, poor Charlie. That was so sad but brilliant writing. thank you people seem to like it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
angelicbella Posted February 2, 2009 Share Posted February 2, 2009 I loved Charlie's point of view, nobody ever seems to think about the father's POV, VERY nice work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
freakie_frenchi Posted February 3, 2009 Author Share Posted February 3, 2009 I loved Charlie's point of view, nobody ever seems to think about the father's POV, VERY nice work! gee...thanx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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