thehazelnut Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 (edited) My eyes were instantly drawn to her as she moved towards me. My first thought was of defense, to protect myself, but I stopped. She radiated warmth, something I had never seen in any vampire before; they were cold, emotionally numbed. But not her. Everyone melted away around her, leaving her standing there, a beautiful solitary figure. She looked at me, and a thrill of recognition flashed in her eyes. She knew me, somehow. I didn't care; I was more alive than I had ever been since that dreadful night in 1863, just by standing near her, feeling a faint wave of her happiness, sensing her hope. "You've kept me waiting a long time," she said, crossing her arms, raising an eyebrow. Her face lit up with a smile. I gave a small smile in return, reveling in the moment; it had been an age since I had smiled for any other reason than the rush of vengeance. I bowed my head slightly. "I'm sorry ma'am," I said, looking up to see her eyes staring right into mine. I knew for certain then that I did have a soul. It may be battered and bruised from those many lives I had taken, but I had one nonetheless, for she was looking right into it. I had no idea who she was, but it didn't seem to matter. I straightened, my eyes never leaving hers, and we gazed at one another. Her eyes were a beautiful amber, studying me intently. She knew me almost better than she knew herself, I could see. We stayed like that for the longest time. It made the eternity I was yet to live seem like just a mere second. She held out a hand, and I took it without even thinking twice. I kissed it, and she laughed. "Jasper Whitlock," I said, by means of introduction. She raised my hand above her head, twirling underneath it, and I chuckled, the noise sounding strange, almost alien to my ears. She came to a stop only inches away from me, her fingers linking with mine. "I know, you idiot," she scolded, her tone familiar. Her feelings washed over me, and behind the joy I sensed love. She loved me, yet I didn't even know her name. I didn't understand the moment. I didn't try to; I knew such an act would be entirely pointless. Instead, I gave myself over to it. Utterly, completely. I placed my hands either side of her face, and she placed hers over mine. I felt her emotions so intimately, more intimately than I had ever felt anyone else's. I didn't just feel her emotions; I felt her thoughts. I felt as if I had known her always. I felt as if I had been waiting for her, not the other way around. I felt that we were true soul mates, and that we would spend our lifetimes together, from this moment on. I felt love. I felt happiness. I felt hope. Alice Tapper Aged 14 Edited February 5, 2009 by thehazelnut Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightshadewolf Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 awwwwwwwwwwwwwww! <3 jasper and alice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LeahBlack. Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Awhhhhhh, Jasper and Alice! Love love loveeeee! 'tis amazinggg! xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beckycullen113 Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 this kind of fills in one of the blanks for me, i tried to do that in my fan fiction, its really sweet and I like that its not depressing, cute! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thehazelnut Posted January 30, 2009 Author Share Posted January 30, 2009 Thanks guys Been meaning to write it for a while, so this competition was a good reason to finally do it! And I'm a HUGE fan of Jasper and Alice (well, obviously!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mrs.CharCullen Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Oh its so good!!! Jasper and ALice:P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms_Dazzled Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Aww i loved it.. I love Jasper and Alice's relationship... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chimmykins Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Awww! Jasper and Alice. I loved it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carlistara Posted January 30, 2009 Share Posted January 30, 2009 Wow! Beautiful language and the story: Awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jjthedq Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 That was absolutely brilliantly written. Your writing is so eloquent, so passionate. When I read, I didn't feel like I was reading your interpretation of Jasper's experience...it was like peering into his soul. Have you got any other stories you might be willing to share? This one was just incredible! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thehazelnut Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 That was absolutely brilliantly written. Your writing is so eloquent, so passionate. When I read, I didn't feel like I was reading your interpretation of Jasper's experience...it was like peering into his soul. Have you got any other stories you might be willing to share? This one was just incredible! Wow, thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it! I'm afraid I don't have anything much to share at the moment - this was my first go at fanfiction - but I'll definitely try writing more if I get any good ideas :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bewarethepossums Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 This was amazingly written. Your way with language is very lovey and lyrical and you almost made me cry! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JaneDoe Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Nice! I like that you have gone with a storyline that we know and taken it further than the author. Well done...(your my favourite) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xVickyCullenx Posted January 31, 2009 Share Posted January 31, 2009 Love it Jasper and Alice are my favourite Twilight couple, and I love how you've taken their story further. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thehazelnut Posted January 31, 2009 Author Share Posted January 31, 2009 Wow, thanks guys :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jjthedq Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Absolutely keep writing. You're incredibly talented! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evie_Nitram Posted February 2, 2009 Share Posted February 2, 2009 Aww that's so cute. Very well written to. I think you've caught the essense of Alice brilliantly!! Well done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
angelicbella Posted February 3, 2009 Share Posted February 3, 2009 Awwww, so good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrasails Posted February 3, 2009 Share Posted February 3, 2009 Aahhh, that was a lovely story. Loved it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thehazelnut Posted February 5, 2009 Author Share Posted February 5, 2009 Glad you enjoyed And thanks, I tried to get Alice's nature across - I kind of blatantly got the spinning-under-hand idea from the film, but I felt the moment was just too cute for me not to have my own little dedication to it in my story ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
timpe Posted February 18, 2009 Share Posted February 18, 2009 Fantastic - I love your use of language and choosing my fave couple helped too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rosiealmulla Posted February 18, 2009 Share Posted February 18, 2009 That was really wonderful- well done! It's amazingly written, really how I imagined it should have been =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thehazelnut Posted February 20, 2009 Author Share Posted February 20, 2009 Thanks guys! Glad you liked it :) They're definitely my favourite couple too - hence this choice for a fanfiction! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
izzymon172 Posted February 21, 2009 Share Posted February 21, 2009 it's amazing! great job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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