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[MRs.CharCullen]

A Kiss

We were standing in the clearing, near the reservation. It was spring and one of Forks few sunny days. There wasn’t a cloud in the sky. The rays of light sparkled on the grass and the scent of flowers hung thick in the air. Now was the moment, I thought. Far enough from the house so dad wouldn’t here me…

Plucking up my courage I turned and Jake was standing closer than I had expected. My senses were usually so sharp; I could hear a twig falling from miles away.  I was sure he could here my heart beating faster. What was wrong with me? Jacob was just a friend, my very best friend, but nevertheless just a friend.

But lately…

I had never noticed before how many different colors his russet fur had in the sun or how beautiful his dark eyes were. The way his laughter made my heart glow and his smile made me want to sing. How I felt unsure when he wasn’t by my side and hours felt like days when he had to leave to go on patrol.

He looked up and I saw the quizzical look on his face. As always he was on his guard, worried I wasn’t perfectly alright. Slowly, I put my hand on his face. If I weren’t half vampire I was sure it would be shaking. I felt his hot breath on the palm of my hand and sighed. I saw the surprise on his face as he heard what I was telling him. Not telling but showing. Not words but colors, bright and shiny, everything that was Jacob, his smile, his laugh, images of us together, running side by side, racing, having fun. Even in years to come I could never forgot that moment of pure bliss. I looked into his eyes, leaned forward and felt his lips on mine.

"Nessie..?"

"Yes?"

"You’re my gravity… you know that?"

I laughed.

Mom had told me how much she loved dad. I had never understood. Now I knew.

Charlotte a.k.a MRs.CharCullen
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Edited by MRs.CharCullen, 14 February 2009 - 07:11 PM.

[AngelicBella]

That's cute!!
Loved it.

[MRs.CharCullen]

Thanks I was a bit nervous, I actually suck at writing anything ( Im more of a math person)  but I wanted to try anyway :)

[iDazzle]

omg, so cuuuuuute You'll never say you can't write again!!
(your dutch just sucks, that's all xD)

[MRs.CharCullen]

iDazzle, on Feb 10 2009, 08:54 PM, said:

omg, so cuuuuuute You'll never say you can't write again!!
(your dutch just sucks, that's all xD)

Youre just saying that cuz you have to sit next to me in Bio and chemistry

[Hails]

haha what are you two like? Its a cute story, nice perspective

[MRs.CharCullen]

Hails, on Feb 11 2009, 04:21 PM, said:

haha what are you two like? Its a cute story, nice perspective

Thanks

[Lizzy]

That should totally be the next book- Renesmee and Jacob!

[MRs.CharCullen]

Lizzy, on Feb 11 2009, 10:40 PM, said:

That should totally be the next book- Renesmee and Jacob!

Yeah it would be so cute  

[LibLob-x]

Really sweet - loved it!  

[MRs.CharCullen]

LibLob-x, on Feb 12 2009, 08:36 PM, said:

Really sweet - loved it!  

awwhh.. thank you

[xVickyCullenx]

Awwwwww!

[TwilightT.S]

Awww how sweet! Nice idea with Renesmee's P.O.V by the way

[MRs.CharCullen]

TwilightT.S, on Feb 17 2009, 06:36 PM, said:

Awww how sweet! Nice idea with Renesmee's P.O.V by the way

Aww thanks    im glad you liked it

[Jodierawr]

It's interesting reading from Nessie's point of view, and it's really sweet to read about her feelings for Jacob.
Totally cute <3
Good job hun :)
xxx

[MRs.CharCullen]

Jodierawr, on Feb 18 2009, 09:00 PM, said:

It's interesting reading from Nessie's point of view, and it's really sweet to read about her feelings for Jacob.
Totally cute <3
Good job hun :)
xxx

Im so glad someone actually likes it never done this before

[Isabela]

wOw! that was awesome! i admit i never really liked nessie and jake together, but thanks to your story, i'm warming up to the idea

[MRs.CharCullen]

Isabela, on Feb 21 2009, 10:12 AM, said:

wOw! that was awesome! i admit i never really liked nessie and jake together, but thanks to your story, i'm warming up to the idea

Oh yay Spreading the love and thank you!!

[Lollipopz12]

   This is so good
I love it, it is nice to understand a little bit more about Renesmee's feelings towards Jacob
It's amazing, awwwwwwwwww

[MRs.CharCullen]

Lollipopz12, on Feb 21 2009, 10:43 PM, said:

   This is so good
I love it, it is nice to understand a little bit more about Renesmee's feelings towards Jacob
It's amazing, awwwwwwwwww

aaww thank you Im so glad you like it I just wanted to do something different , hopefully there will come a next book about them