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Title: Into the Night
Rating: G
Word count: 167
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The daylight has long become shrouded for Sméagol. The sun does not give her light to him – she shuns him, as he shuns her. The sun had been shining the day he killed his cousin. He still remembers how the mighty Anduin had looked silver under the sun’s gaze. Drops of water on Déagol’s brow had glittered until they dried, dying in midday heat.
The sun still holds a place for Sméagol, if he would only realize it. He has created the shroud and wrapped it around his own eyes. The sun has not abandoned him entirely. She waits, and hopes, that he will untie that shroud from his eyes and throw it aside. She waits, and she waits.
Each moment of each day, Gollum pulls that knot tighter. His thin, bony fingers are stronger than their appearance belies. He has come to realize that Sméagol very rarely struggles against him now and for that he is grateful. He keeps pulling, knowing that one day Sméagol will become blind.
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Into the Night
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, Jan 11 2006 01:44 AM
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Posted 11 January 2006 - 01:44 AM
'Bewitch the mind and ensnare the senses.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
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Posted 11 January 2006 - 07:53 AM
Oooh, le good!
Very interesting metaphor. Poor Smeagol!
Very interesting metaphor. Poor Smeagol!
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Posted 11 January 2006 - 11:32 AM
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! 
'Bewitch the mind and ensnare the senses.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
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Posted 11 January 2006 - 06:55 PM
Ohhh well done!! I liked this - it's short, but to the point and well written.
If I could make one difference to it, it would have to be the repetitive use of the word shroud... Maybe a different one would fit in to give more variation within the sentence!
Lizzi xxx
If I could make one difference to it, it would have to be the repetitive use of the word shroud... Maybe a different one would fit in to give more variation within the sentence!
Lizzi xxx
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Posted 11 January 2006 - 07:05 PM
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it! Will bear in mind your suggestion - I'll probably be editing this before I archive it over at my account on Skyehawke!
'Bewitch the mind and ensnare the senses.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
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Posted 16 January 2006 - 06:23 PM
Very good. I love Smeagol/Gollum.
I was more expecting Denethor fic from you though...
I was more expecting Denethor fic from you though...
"I swear, if we don't get out of this soon, I'm gonna lose it. Lose it. Means go crazy, nuts, insane, bonzo, lose possession of one's faculties, three fries short of a Happy Meal, WACKO!" - Jack O'Neill, Window of Opportunity.
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Posted 16 January 2006 - 07:26 PM
Hee, thank you!
I know, but I thought I'd have a wider audience if I didn't write about Denethor...apparently not though, lol! Maybe I'll submit another before the end!
I know, but I thought I'd have a wider audience if I didn't write about Denethor...apparently not though, lol! Maybe I'll submit another before the end!
'Bewitch the mind and ensnare the senses.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
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Posted 18 January 2006 - 10:00 AM
Hey, elenmai, don't encourage her, she has exams!
And there's nothing wrong with branching out, character-wise.
And there's nothing wrong with branching out, character-wise.
Top Ten People Llin Would DIE If She Could Ever Meet (in no particular order):
1) Maggie Smith
2) Gillian Anderson
3) Julie Walters
4) Alan Rickman
5) Annabeth Gish
6) Teryl Rothery
7) Mitch Pileggi
8) David Hewlett
9) Amanda Tapping
10) Lucy Lawless
1) Maggie Smith
2) Gillian Anderson
3) Julie Walters
4) Alan Rickman
5) Annabeth Gish
6) Teryl Rothery
7) Mitch Pileggi
8) David Hewlett
9) Amanda Tapping
10) Lucy Lawless
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Posted 18 January 2006 - 11:50 AM
Mwahaha, the voice of reason steps in *g*
'Bewitch the mind and ensnare the senses.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
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Posted 18 January 2006 - 11:51 AM
Hmm, yes, you are obviously revising right now...
Top Ten People Llin Would DIE If She Could Ever Meet (in no particular order):
1) Maggie Smith
2) Gillian Anderson
3) Julie Walters
4) Alan Rickman
5) Annabeth Gish
6) Teryl Rothery
7) Mitch Pileggi
8) David Hewlett
9) Amanda Tapping
10) Lucy Lawless
1) Maggie Smith
2) Gillian Anderson
3) Julie Walters
4) Alan Rickman
5) Annabeth Gish
6) Teryl Rothery
7) Mitch Pileggi
8) David Hewlett
9) Amanda Tapping
10) Lucy Lawless
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Posted 18 January 2006 - 01:46 PM
cosmic_llin, on Jan 18 2006, 11:51 AM, said:
Hmm, yes, you are obviously revising right now...
As are you, Llin. I don't think anything I say could make Cadiliniel more likely to write Denethor fic...
"I swear, if we don't get out of this soon, I'm gonna lose it. Lose it. Means go crazy, nuts, insane, bonzo, lose possession of one's faculties, three fries short of a Happy Meal, WACKO!" - Jack O'Neill, Window of Opportunity.
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Posted 19 January 2006 - 12:03 PM
*waves little 'I Support Denethor!' flag*
'Bewitch the mind and ensnare the senses.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
'Since when have you been interested in beauty?'/'Since I met you.'
'But if doom denies this to me, then I shall have naught; neither life diminished, nor love halved, nor honour abated.'
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